The Punk Rock Girl

[Revolte]

Peacock hair and zebra legs,
leather vest and vodka stains.
Studded belt and knee high boots,
not what you need but what you choose.
Slender waist but perky chest,
shown in pride to flaunt the best.
Painted arms and amber lips,
punk rock drive in every kiss.

[hillwalker]

This rocks - a spiky little poem that paints a vivid picture of the subject.
I like the clever wy each line includes a pair of matched or mis-matched descriptors.

Brlliant.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Short - but very tart!

[Hawkman]

Hi Revolte,

Great fun this little portrait which really rattles along. Love it. H

[dizzydoll]

LOL, I loved it even tho it wouldnt suit me. lol, but its not about me, its about Princes' tart. LOL. peace. :smile5:

[Il Dante]

Pretty vivid poem!

My only issue was:



shown in pride to flaunt the best.


This line seemed a bit custom-fit to the above line ending with "chest."
Cheers.

[blank|verse]

Well, this one's begging to be turned into a Revolte punk-rock anthem. I'll check your MySpace site in future.

See if you can get Rod Stewart on guest vocals. He seems to fit the descripton of the first line quite well himself:

Peacock hair and zebra legs,

[OctopusGarden]

Pretty vivid poem!

My only issue was:



This line seemed a bit custom-fit to the above line ending with "chest."
Cheers.

yeah, just from being predisposed to the idea of "flaunt the chest" makes it a bit rough of a read for those lines, because the mind expects what isn't there. but that isn't a bad thing.

edit: and youre (revolte) an anarchist, sweet!

[Revolte]

@Blank lmao, nothing surprising about that though, his name is Rod after all.

@Oct 6 years running :)


thank you everyone.