The Fight

[sakaharah]

The Fight

You tell me to get it right
You tell me you don't want to fight
But baby girl things aint black and white
There are two options here, day or night

Fighting so hard to show you what we are
Its only been a few months, you cant have gone that far
Round one ended at the bar
Round two. Putting on my gloves, ready to spar
Fighting so hard to keep us alive
Once, twice, thrice

Hit the floor
Should i get up for more?
Ten, nine, eight
Is it too late?
Seven, six, five
Are you there? Are we alive?
Four, three, two
I'm getting up, baby, this is for you...

JR

[blazeofglory]

The Fight

There are two options here, day or night

Fighting so hard to show you what we are

Fighting so hard to keep us alive


JR

This is really a beautiful poem. I like these quoted lines. It has great symbolic meanings. I subscribe to the idea that there are only two options: day or night. Either we fight or reconcile and how can we reconcile if we really cannot fight. Fight is a great life truth and we are here now just because our ancestors fought so many numbers of battles. And we must indeed fight.

We will have to fight everywhere. If we do not fight at home how can we reserve space in this world. In a family you have to fight or else someone mightier than yourself will confiscate your possessions.

Man must by birth learn the art of fighting or subduing others or else you will get subdued or dominated in the end. This is the acerbic truth we cannot deny in point of fact

I find the poem very inspiring and spoke something I longed to speak and was searching for right words to express these emotions

[sakaharah]

I am glad i can share my poetry with you (: I enjoyed writing this peice and it is ofcoarse from personal experienc, an experience we must all go through day to day. Look out for more as i will post my poems here more reguarly (:

[free]

This sounds like a song, and looks like a picture. Its visual form gives pleasure to the eyes. Besides its rhytmic, acustic pleasure of a song. Nicely put tugether to get in accord with the meaning. Thanks for sharing.

[Il Dante]

[CENTER]The Fight
Should i get up for more?


No, "i" shouldn't get up for more. But "I" should get up for more, yes perhaps.:smilewinkgrin:

As i have said before, I am a stickler for the CAPITALIZED i.

[Hayseed Huck]

Stop rhyming---

that is, until you study how to hide the rhyme.

Your rhyme snacks me in the face like a bar-rag.

Joe the bartender slopped his bar-rag across,
down the length of the counter and back-- then
wadded that soaked thing and slapped me the face.

That's how I felt when I read these rhymes.

It's a bad poem, pal.

I advise you do nothing but read contempory
poetry by the published poets for the next
month.

Write nothing during that time.

But wait! Maybe you just want to write your
poems for the fun of it-- and have no desire
to get better.

Maybe you just like to post poetry, as you
would call someone up on your cell phone and
say, "The weather is nice here ... goodbye."

HH