Icy Blunder

[Konstantine914]

I was eighteen...
I was ageless...
I was persuaded...
I was careless...
In the nights that covered thickly, my actions
Loaded pistols were passed
Caged in tightly, were reactions.
Thumping heartbeats of jaded children
Exchanging silent blunder...
Beaming flicker lights, heating snowy mist
Packed in tightly, icy sunder.
Sucked in quickly, so heavy
With redden tight fists...
I was eighteen.
I was agless.
I was preoccupied.
I was bliss.

[dizzydoll]

This was an interesting read, particularly for its stop-start affect. Good job. :biggrin5:

[blazeofglory]

enigmatic

[Buh4Bee]

Awesome poem.

Nice area code, my mom lives in Nyack.

[hillwalker]

A very tight, tense piece of writing - creates an electric atmosphere.

I like this - good stuff.

[PrinceMyshkin]

I can't say that I understand this as well as I'd like to but your command of the rhythm, your restraint, your melody are marvelous.

[Konstantine914]

thank yall for your kind words!