Blood Lust

[nipper]

I see it in you pumping.
I hear it in me swishing.
In my sleep I lose all thought.
In this state I scratch my face.
I do it just for some release.

[Hayseed Huck]

I provisionally like this--

I know grammar is a stepchild of poetry,
but

"I see it in you pumping."

Should read,

"I see it in your pumping."


Possessive case before the gerund.

HH