Barbwire Dreams

[nipper]

I toss and turn because i can not sleep.
I think its because my barbwire dreams.
I fell them tearing into my flesh.
Its like im breaking through a wired mess.
It seems it is slowly closing in around me.
It slowly pulls me deeper in.
I hate these dreams of hate.
I hate them because i know there memories.

[haymanali]

Thought provoking. Death and hate sneaky follow us like our indomitable shadow.

[Pryderi Agni]

Aside from the spelling mistakes ('they're' and the omission of 'of' in the second line) it's pretty good. I think you should keep working on it and make it longer.

[Buh4Bee]

reminds me of cancer- deadly disease.
fell-feel
I think this is one of those poems that was written on the whim of inspiration. It has some meat to it, but the fluidity is lacking. On the other hand, who cares? It seems fine as it is.