Oh my friend

[southerner]

I've been writing poems for so long time... but while I was surfing the internet, accidentally, I found this this web-site, which reminded me of the peaceful past days of love and passion, in which the poetry was running with blood, generally, I decided to return to poerty, and to this forum in order to regain what it might be called "The talent" of writing poetry...

If I'm welcomed back, please fellas, ladies and gentlemen, please, much support, much appreciation... much I like you and poetry...

best regards!

returnee / Southerner Bam


Oh my friend

Oh my friend do not be afraid
You have to say your word
Remember that call a spade a spade
And pull out your rusty sword
Protect your ideas and beliefs
Do not scare of anything that hollow
Your silence will make you one of the thieves
And the steps of the dumb evil you will follow
No one is able to hurt you or to kill
Except God who harms and saves
He has the orders and the will
And he saves his only slaves
Death is not just to die
And life is not just to live
But you die when you say "bye"
From the people's minds and leave.


I know that this poem has a problem with the metric system, but I like it, and that's why I re-publish it again, I promise you with other better poems.

[breathtest]

I like the way this is really rounded like the classic poems.

[PrinceMyshkin]

To me, there's something a bit lumpy in this, as if you wavered between your desire to be poetic and your struggle to just say what you needed to.

[southerner]

To me, there's something a bit lumpy in this, as if you wavered between your desire to be poetic and your struggle to just say what you needed to.


Thank you bro, if I understand you well that I have stopped writing poetry for a long time, maybe I have the tools, but maybe the circumstances around me prevented me from doing a lot of things, and the main circumstance was the main circumstance that developed my English and writing poetry exactly, the reason or "circumstance" is "L0VE", when you have it between your hands, it's good, but once you lose it, it becomes evil. You may understand me now,,, and as I told you much support,,, thank you for your reply....

[southerner]

I like the way this is really rounded like the classic poems.

I can say nothing except THANK YOU :biggrin5:

[OctopusGarden]

Oh my friend do not be afraid
You have to say your word
Remember that call a spade a spade
And pull out your rusty sword
Protect your ideas and beliefs

Death is not just to die
And life is not just to live
But you die when you say "bye"
From the people's minds and leave
I enjoy poems that tell me what to do (not sarcasm). It offers another way of looking at something

[southerner]

I enjoy poems that tell me what to do (not sarcasm). It offers another way of looking at something

You know something... I've never thought of being a poet!!!
Thank you (OctopusGarden) for your support...

[southerner]

I wished if someone would tell me the strong and weak points of my poetry, to help me improve my future poems...
Thank you alllllll....