heleen.C
04-12-2010, 12:51 PM
ok people i really need a little help here it's my first story and i need to write it for school
I am dutch so any spelling critiques are very much welcome as well
The game
Chris was running through the streets a man in black followed him, he was wearing a black trench coat and a black hat ,Chris ran into a store and stormed through the people who were shopping the man followed him, he had a look in his eye a look like he was having fun as he ran after him. Chris rushed down the stairs and back in the streets running in a alley, it had a dead end, for a minute he panicked he didn’t know where to go, he turned around and there was the man in black again. He still had that same look in his eyes as he was walking up to him . Chris saw no chance to escape he was closed in, closed in between the man, a container and a brick wall. As Chris was looking around looking for a way to escape, he noticed that the container was right in front of the wall. He jumped on the container and made a jump for the wall, he was able to grab the ridge, in the meanwhile the man in black was coming closer. Chris tried to push himself on the wall he succeeded and jumped over, leaving the man in black behind the wall. Chris continued his way like nothing had happened. He went into a café and ordered a cup of coffee. When he sat down at a table near the window he noticed an other man in black was watching him from the back, so he tried to make his way out silent and unnoticeable. The man in the back noticed him, and followed him out. Chris started to run again, he ran through small streets and parking lots. He tried to make his way into the park. The man in black was right behind him he was faster than him so he was coming closer every second . This man had that same look in his eyes, that look like he was enjoying himself, like he had fun. Chris knew he couldn’t out run him so he hid himself behind one of the trees. As he was gasping for breath from the run, he was looking at the man in black who was clueless of where Chris had gone. He was looking around nervously trying to figure out where Chris had gone. He couldn’t find him so he walked away again. Chris saw the man walking away and followed him. Than the man in black stopped to help an old lady up who fell when she was feeding the ducks. Chris knew that this was his chance, his one shot, so made a run for it, he stormed up to the man in black, when he reached him he quickly grabbed the picture hanging on the mans neck congratulations the man said you won as he handed all of the pictures he had collected, Chris was the last player left so that mend he had won the game of assassin.
by: Heleen Goedhart
I am dutch so any spelling critiques are very much welcome as well
The game
Chris was running through the streets a man in black followed him, he was wearing a black trench coat and a black hat ,Chris ran into a store and stormed through the people who were shopping the man followed him, he had a look in his eye a look like he was having fun as he ran after him. Chris rushed down the stairs and back in the streets running in a alley, it had a dead end, for a minute he panicked he didn’t know where to go, he turned around and there was the man in black again. He still had that same look in his eyes as he was walking up to him . Chris saw no chance to escape he was closed in, closed in between the man, a container and a brick wall. As Chris was looking around looking for a way to escape, he noticed that the container was right in front of the wall. He jumped on the container and made a jump for the wall, he was able to grab the ridge, in the meanwhile the man in black was coming closer. Chris tried to push himself on the wall he succeeded and jumped over, leaving the man in black behind the wall. Chris continued his way like nothing had happened. He went into a café and ordered a cup of coffee. When he sat down at a table near the window he noticed an other man in black was watching him from the back, so he tried to make his way out silent and unnoticeable. The man in the back noticed him, and followed him out. Chris started to run again, he ran through small streets and parking lots. He tried to make his way into the park. The man in black was right behind him he was faster than him so he was coming closer every second . This man had that same look in his eyes, that look like he was enjoying himself, like he had fun. Chris knew he couldn’t out run him so he hid himself behind one of the trees. As he was gasping for breath from the run, he was looking at the man in black who was clueless of where Chris had gone. He was looking around nervously trying to figure out where Chris had gone. He couldn’t find him so he walked away again. Chris saw the man walking away and followed him. Than the man in black stopped to help an old lady up who fell when she was feeding the ducks. Chris knew that this was his chance, his one shot, so made a run for it, he stormed up to the man in black, when he reached him he quickly grabbed the picture hanging on the mans neck congratulations the man said you won as he handed all of the pictures he had collected, Chris was the last player left so that mend he had won the game of assassin.
by: Heleen Goedhart