Dylan was right

[GossamerTruth]

Dylan was right.
You know when the best ones come,
cause they leave you lonesome when they go.

Sitting, smoking cigarettes, working the world out in my car.
“Cool as s--t”,
but soap boxing isn’t tantamount to progress.

Can’t you see?
Loneliness fills my eyes,
when yours look away.

I'm looking at you.
In a room full of lovers who exhale trust,
and I am alone...

[dizzydoll]

I dont know much about poetry but this certainly moved me. I like this verse:

Can’t you see?
Loneliness fills my eyes,
when yours look away.

:smile5:

[lallison]

I like the voice that comes out in the first stanza.

[GossamerTruth]

Thanks for the reviews!

I wasn't sure what kind of rhyme to put it in, so I decided to work something out myself; something confessional-like if you will.

Any suggestions?

Thanks again :)

[Hayseed Huck]

What are these **** in your poem?

**** are more vulgar than the words
they stand for.

Attention is drawn.

But, I abide by the rules.

In a way, I'm glad. I now can write what
I want, knowing the **** will be there to
turn water to wine.

HH

[Buh4Bee]

I'm really not sure what to say. I like it and maybe you should file it as one of your earlier poems. Take it out in twenty years and thank God you let that guy/gal go.

[GossamerTruth]

Thank you Jersea, I think I feel the same way.

HH- I completely agree that those automatic *'s cause an eyesore.

Thanks again!