Dream less doubt

[dizzydoll]

Doubt kills all dreams
by allowing
such stranglehold
to seal fate

Dreams surpass all doubt
calmly stilling
tempestuous seas
to seize destiny


This is the first time I've tried to write something like this.... :blush:

[Il Dante]

I really like it! I like its simplicity: no pretentiousness, just elegant simplicity.

But even more, I appreciate the sentiment contained in this poem. Recently I have been pondering the effect that particular philosophies have had on western society and on humanity. It has led me to very similar sentiments, which you put so simply but so eloquently: there is a place for healthy doubt. But excessive doubt is a disease, and it can kill our dreams.

If we doubt and do not have dreams we can survive, we can stay alive; but only the person who dares to dream can be truly living.

[dizzydoll]

Thank you for your courtesy Il Dante, I really appreciate your feedback. I am a simple girl who dares to dream. :D
I thought it might be better called 'Dreamless Doubt' instead. Would that make a difference?

[paradoxical]

I like it! I think this is good, plus it has a wonderful theme.

[dizzydoll]

I have no clue what to say, except of course thank you. :smile5:

[lallison]

very nice, it would make a nice poster or fit onto an inspirational calendar. I like the reflective quality and the paradox that the verses have.

[Hawkman]

I too like this, It's just so elegent and polished. Nice - H

[dizzydoll]

Wow, thank you so much all of you. Much appreciation

[Il Dante]

Thank you for your courtesy Il Dante, I really appreciate your feedback. I am a simple girl who dares to dream. :D
I thought it might be better called 'Dreamless Doubt' instead. Would that make a difference?

So the choice is between "Dream less doubt" and "Dreamless doubt"? If that is the case I would lean towards "Dreamless doubt" I guess. But either way...

[hillwalker]

Just spotted this dd

I like the clever wordplay in the first line of each stanza - one almost a mirror image of the other.
And the message is very expertly and economically expressed -

verse 1 a warning of self-fulfilling prophecies from a pessimistic outlook on life
and verse 2 showing that good things are often the fruits of optimism.

A worthy poem.

H

[dizzydoll]

You are such a sweetheart walker, I cant believe you brought it out again. It was my first attempt at poetry.. ever.
Right now my energy is focused on the power of our thoughts, and as we so often see -- doubt kills too many dreams. :ack2:

[free]

Two stanzas explaining each other through the contrast of the effects expressed in them. I suppose that the poem sprouted from a need to say something that is very true, in the way which will make an impression stronger than it could be done in an ordinary, prose statement. The statement is given the poetic form, and I think, that it could be even stronger if you plucked more words from the garden of poetry in order to enrich your poem’s picturesque impression.

[N.W.Alexander]

Honestly I love this "dreams surpass all doubt" I would put this poem on my wall so ya very good

[dizzydoll]

Why thank you so much Free and Alex, I was just about to call it a night here when I saw this thread back up again. I really appreciate it. It was my first attempt at writing poetry, guess you can call it beginners luck. :biggrin5:

[ur_shadow89]

Is this your first poem? It seems you've been writing for quite a while now. Good job! I like it!