Human

[Revolte]

( I have no idea what I was trying to do with this one, just had to vent. )


You disgust me!
And that golden crown you don
Does not hide you,
You hellish painted swan!
You curse me.
With every touch and grin,
To haunt me
And test my passion's sin.
I hate you!
For all that you have done,
But I love you
For the brilliance of your con.

[Hawkman]

Hi Revolte,

This one trundles of the tongue
and with a smirk I read its song
for all the venom you have spilled
reveals your pen to be quite skilled.

Nice one, H

[lallison]

I liked your owl in "flutter" much better, but I'm a sucker for stories and lots of imagery, this one seems more like an emotional gush.

Still, interesting shape, almost like the head of a pitchfork. Nicely expressed too.

[PrinceMyshkin]

What's especially interesting and effective in this is the turnabout in the final two lines. "The brilliance of your coin" is not an immediately comprehensible line but it is a provocative one.