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Dark Muse
03-27-2010, 11:22 PM
The Convenience of Death

I watch muted from the shadows,
one by one they parade
up to the podium, draped
in their mournful black
and one by one they speak
their dignified lies.

Blank faces strained
around the eyes, lips pursed tight
from the effort of their act?
Or do they cry real tears,
those that don't know the
things I do, those afraid
of the truth?

How convenient is death for some,
how it absolves the sins of life,
to become a mortal saint overnight
by so simple an act as passing
through life.

"Don't speak ill of the dead,"
they chide, and it takes all I have
not to laugh with bitter brittleness.

How I long to stand up
and march down the somber aisle,
among the sea of drab suits,
each looking a copy of the next,
to stand before all their watching eyes,
and scream out to the world,
to speak the truth, a laundry list
of crimes, to point my finger
without remorse.

But naked of grief
half-hysterical in a quest
for justice absolved of pretenses
would they applaud?
Nod in quiet consent, acknowledging
what they feared to say, be grateful
to have their eyes opened?

No, I would then be the bad guy,
as they would frown and shake their
heads in half-disgust, half-pity
for this demented creature
who simply does not understand
how things are meant to work.

Instead in the silence of my mind,
I say, "I am glad he is dead,
the world is a better place."

stephofthenight
03-28-2010, 12:37 AM
deep, pulling and beautiful like all of your works. You are an amazing writer. this poems draws you in and holds you in a twisting beauty until the end. I <3 it thank you for sharing, a real treat to read.

Dark Muse
03-28-2010, 02:01 AM
Thank you for your comments!

PrinceMyshkin
03-28-2010, 11:19 AM
Indeed, a very solemn philosophical rumination!

In v 5, "isle" should be 'aisle',
in v 7,1 "by" should be 'be'.

Dark Muse
03-28-2010, 01:29 PM
Ahh thank you, I will go fix that.

lallison
03-29-2010, 06:10 AM
dark and scornful. Kind of makes me shutter. Were you thinking of anyone in particular who dies here?

paperleaves
03-29-2010, 09:36 AM
How powerful and haunting, DM. Your imagery never ceases to amaze me. There is something so strong and beautiful in your words, almost like a great female warrior, graceful yet deadly.

The only thing that didn't do it for me was the last two stanzas. Something about the "no" preceding those closing words changed the tone, IMO.

Great poem nonetheless! Thank you for sharing!

love
Kate

Buh4Bee
03-29-2010, 10:08 AM
I passed this one a few times and what a mistake! It is brutally honest, even if you are writing about being glad this person is dead so shortly after their funeral. Must have been a jerk, and even in death no one will admit it. Strange how humanity can continue to glorify the undeserving even in death. It's it the right thing to do? Wow! do I sound like a cynic!

Dark Muse
03-29-2010, 12:20 PM
I passed this one a few times and what a mistake! It is brutally honest, even if you are writing about being glad this person is dead so shortly after their funeral. Must have been a jerk, and even in death no one will admit it. Strange how humanity can continue to glorify the undeserving even in death. It's it the right thing to do? Wow! do I sound like a cynic!

Yes that is what this poem is about, questioning the fact that when soemone dies they become like a saint on earth and no one dares speak ill of them, but the truth is some people are just bad people, and death does not undo the things they did while alive, so is it really so wrong to speak the truth?

thecatwithfish
03-29-2010, 12:28 PM
I liked the thoughtful questioning tone. Particularly the moody imagery - it was rather emotive.