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ur_shadow89
03-25-2010, 10:23 AM
Have you ever felt my pain?
Have you seen my tears?
Have you ever realize my presence?
Or even feel my every need?

Have you seen my smile?
Whenever I pass you by?
Have you ever noticed my existence,
My existence you once knew.

Alone have I become
To this world where I once belonged
Isolated in my own solitary place
I plunged myself into darkness.

Sorrow in my heart
Pierced by your words,
Engraved in my soul
The torments of my pain.

Have you ever read my mind?
Or seen these eyes of mine?
Have you ever touched my heart?


Have you seen me?...

PrinceMyshkin
03-25-2010, 12:09 PM
A heart-rending cry, one that many of us have probably felt.

I think it's a technical mistake to use "u" in place of "you" unless your intent is to parody text-messaging; but here the switch from one to the other is disruptive.

psychofemale
03-25-2010, 12:44 PM
I truelt felt this. bravo!

ur_shadow89
03-25-2010, 02:52 PM
I think it's a technical mistake to use "u" in place of "you" unless your intent is to parody text-messaging; but here the switch from one to the other is disruptive.

Thanks Prince for your comment and for pointing out my mistake, I guess I've overlooked that.

@psychofemale: Many thanks for sharing your thoughts.