Solitude

[psychofemale]

Solitude
and you're beside me
The lights flicker
but still I can't see
what lies ahead
the future's dark
just a blur
we've lost our spark
such as shame
some would say
if they saw the real us
for just one day

The bitter truth
just one excuse
take what proof
I soon will lose
out the door
onto the floor
with the blame
can't show you more

You've seen it all
and all of me
take it or leave it




please don't leave.:confused:

[Hawkman]

Hey psychfem, This works really well, the staccato rhythm, just like someone gasping through sobs - the fragmented thoughts. - Nice.

[psychofemale]

thank you so much :)

[PrinceMyshkin]

Not sure why you posted that icon after the last line, but the effect of that line is striking! Such a naked, blatant reversal of the bravado of the bulk of the poem.

[psychofemale]

thank you...i posted the icon because it was a confused look...like is the person going to leave? i appreciate your comment!

[ur_shadow89]

I like it, especially the last stanza.