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kittypaws
03-05-2010, 10:25 AM
The rain falls
Heavier now;
My heart weeps
Sorrow never sleeps.

All things happen
For some reason.
None understood
just because they could

Time will tell
What this will bring,
In the while
I will live,
Many other things.

If I stood still
Then life would fade.
Sorrow never sleeps
You just keep
It at bay.

kittypaws

PrinceMyshkin
03-05-2010, 10:41 AM
I like the pared-down quality of this, the simple statements that gain authority by not being embellished.

Hawkman
03-05-2010, 11:52 AM
I really like this, it almost has the rhythm of a ticking clock giving pace to the thoughts. Nice.

kittypaws
03-05-2010, 11:32 PM
Thank you Prince and Hawk....I like to pack a punch into my writes.

I am one of few words...KISS method!

kittypaws