I want to rip the heart from my chest

[Biggus]

I want to rip the heart from my chest
So I won’t have to feel the pain
Of heart break ever again

I want to rip the heart from my chest
So I don’t have to feel it break
Then I can sit and watch it ache

I want to rip the heart from my chest
So love can no longer hurt me
And with no heart I will finally be free

[MorpheusSandman]

An old theme, but powerfully rendered here. I'm not sure about the efficacy of the opening line repetition. I think once you've said it once that's all that's needed.

[Bar22do]

I want to rip the heart from my chest
So I won’t have to feel the pain
Of heart break ever again

I want to rip the heart from my chest
So I don’t have to feel it break
Then I can sit and watch it ache

I want to rip the heart from my chest
So love can no longer hurt me
And with no heart I will finally be free

I think I can see what you wanted to do here, strip yourself off from layers after layers to null... I tend to agree with MS repetition reads a bit awkwardly here.

[qimissung]

While I kind of liked it. My argument is with the last line. When is he going to figure out he's not really free?

[Biggus]

Thanks all
Thanks all
Thanks all