Isolated Beauty

[Dark Muse]

Isolated Beauty

I know too well
the ice reflected in your eyes
that cold glint
which never quite dies.

There is no life within your tombs
yet I envy the dust
of your womb.

To take refuge in a lifeless barren
some may recoil
but I dream of being inhospitable.

A sort of comfort
to be found in sheltering
a dark empty void.

Winter trees against winter skies
are beautiful to me
it is a burden to be
a vessel of fertility.

I see curses where others
feel blessings
so I look upon you cold moon
in wonder that your beauty
requires nothing to grow.

[PeachesPieces]

love it, "isolated beauty" is a fabulous title, i don't know if this was intentional but i love that "ice" is the first sylable, i dunno, it just seems fitting for this poem, thank you for sharing.

[Dark Muse]

Thank you! I am glad you liked the title, acutally had a difficult time coming up with just the right title for this poem.

[hack]

The barren moon reflected in your poetic eyes, Dark Muse.

The ever receding moon,
drawing away,
becoming,
moving closer to a congress
of desolate moons

[Revolte]

You have to be one of my favorite poets, I havnt read anything of yours that I didnt really enjoy.

[~Sophia~]

Beautiful piece DM. Sultry and smoothe like the author!

[Dark Muse]

Thank you!

[MorpheusSandman]

I really like the icy tone of the piece. I also agree the title is perfect.

[blank|verse]

A strange and unsettling poem, but none the worse for that. In fact, it's stronger because it presents an opinion which goes so much against the grain of received wisdom.

I know other poems you've written have been slightly masculine, but this one seems very feminine, dealing as it does with issues of pregnancy and birth. To see fertility as a 'burden' is very powerful.

On a technical point, I think the poem would benefit from having a more regular structure. The speaker in the poem is quite definite in his/her point of view, but because there isn't the same control in the shape and form of the stanzas, this works against the conviction of what they are saying. Unless, of course, you're deliberately trying to make them sound like they lack conviction in their opinions, but I don't really get that from reading the poem.

Still, a very strong piece.

[Dark Muse]

Thank you, and you quite hit the nail on the head. This is a very perosnal poem, about not wanting to have children, and embracing the idea of bareness, of women finding beauty, value, and self-worth in themselves in spite of rejecting a state of motherhood.