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OllyNeal
02-24-2010, 11:03 AM
Thirty minutes ago he was on one of the biggest high's of his life, the impossible seemed possible and life in its entirety seemed simple.

As he sat delicately on the garden step looking down at the bare trees, listening to their call as the wind whistled through them, the urge to do something more, to be something more had vanished, just as the sun had vanished behind the clouds, or as the last leaf vanished from sight being blown away in the Autumn Air.

His hand hovered softly over the last page of his note pad, lingering as if the only important choice left to make was if the page should be turned, to start over again, because not only was he closing the book of songs he had written, he was also metaphorically closing a chapter of his life, and just like those songs in the book, nothing stood out.

He took a deep breath and rose from the step, the book fell from his lap to the floor, at the same moment the most almighty gust of wind blew through the air, the trees screamed, the birds flew and he felt alive, but just as the high he felt earlier had, the wind died down and slowly disappeared.

It was then he knew and realized that everything in this world would build up and die down over and over again, the seasons, the day, even his moods, the endless cycle, the circle of life would continue for ever more weather he turned the final page or not.

Dixon
02-25-2010, 06:10 PM
I like your story. It´s nicely written. You caught the precious and important atmosphere of a moment in somebody´s life in a very poetic, deep and profound way.
Thanks for sharing.

OllyNeal
02-25-2010, 06:22 PM
Hi Dixon, thanks very much for your kinds words, you have no idea how much i genuinely appreciate them, thanks for your time to read and reply :)


Olly.

Nameless
02-26-2010, 01:46 AM
Great story! I really enjoyed it. But I'm a bit confused, why is the title "Autumn Air"?

Also..



His hand hovered softly over the last page of his note pad, lingering as if the only important choice left to make was if the page should be turned, to start over again, because not only was he closing the book of songs he had written, he was also metaphorically closing a chapter of his life, and just like those songs in the book, nothing stood out.



I kinda felt that it was a bit unnecessary to state this [bolded portion] explicitly. I thought it was implied when you mentioned "to start over again."

OllyNeal
02-26-2010, 06:26 AM
hey nameless, thanks for your reply, im glad you enjoyed it and i really appreciate you spending your time to help me also :D, the reason i called it Autumn Air was because it was the wind that pulls him out of his depression, the seasonal reference was because his no longer on a high but he hasn't fallen properly into his depression yet he's kind of in-between, a bit like summer blending into winter, when the Autumn wind blows (thinking about it that might of been a better title!) it makes him realize how insignificant his problems were and even though he cant stop the depression from coming he knows it wont be long untill he's on a high again.

Your right about the 'metaphorically' bit, i'll take that into to consideration next time i write.

Thanks again for your time Nameless :)

Olly.

Nameless
02-26-2010, 11:03 AM
hey nameless, thanks for your reply, im glad you enjoyed it and i really appreciate you spending your time to help me also :D, the reason i called it Autumn Air was because it was the wind that pulls him out of his depression, the seasonal reference was because his no longer on a high but he hasn't fallen properly into his depression yet he's kind of in-between, a bit like summer blending into winter, when the Autumn wind blows (thinking about it that might of been a better title!) it makes him realize how insignificant his problems were and even though he cant stop the depression from coming he knows it wont be long untill he's on a high again.


Thanks for the explanation. Now I'm even more impressed, I'm looking forward to reading your work in the future :)