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snobie
02-23-2010, 09:46 AM
I dedicated this poem to my twin sister Judy.

Who would I be, if I wasn't me.
Our mother's love lost before we were three.
Cast away branches, you and me.
Cast away branches from our father's tree.
And who would I be if I wasn't me?
Tossed to a family by a court's decree.
Our future, our welfare; not an issue, you see.
We were just two needed pieces; two pawns in their game.
With deceit and lies abounding, just adding to their shame.
And if things had been different, would we be the same?
Had known another family, worn a different last name?
Our memories would have been altered, that is certainly true.
Would that have changed who we are, me and you?
It's a question never to be answered; a forever mystery.
Still, I wonder who I might be; if I wasn't me.
Fond memories of our childhood? No, there is none to be found there.
Was there anyone interested, did anyone care?
And as I ponder these questions; entertained just for awhile.
These thoughts bring forth a brief grin; then transform into a smile.
For I know that who we are, was designed from above.
With God's protection upon us, and his immeasurable love.
So, we are the persons that we are supposed to be.
But, just for a moment; I still wonder, you see.
Who would I be, if I wasn't me?

PrinceMyshkin
02-23-2010, 10:08 AM
Marvelous! I caviled a bit at "God's protection" because it came out of the blue. It will be fine, I'm sure, for those who are believers. They won't need any prior reference to "God" or theology of any sort, but to me it seemed too easy a fix for the issues you were discussing so plaintively. Good work!

tailor STATELY
02-23-2010, 11:35 AM
Thank you for sharing your poem.

Lotsa rhymes. (just sayin')

I found "Who would I be, if I wasn't me" as a rhetorical device to be quite charming.

I wrote a short [perhaps incoherent] piece that touches upon your premise a while back that might be a bit convoluted (a rhetorical answer?):

Past Prescient

The past is what the now is predicated upon
and hence that to be
Would that I could prune that which is past
but then I wouldn't be me

8-23-2008

LOL, but then who would I be ? but the person I would then become.