Death's Call

[sc9108]

Every turn I take it feels like death is watching me... waiting for me... calling me, and haunting me...

I smell his stench, I feel his claws, I even taste the putrid smell of him. I now see into the eyes that have taken those dear.

Times ticking and it cannot wait, I just hope I see those that have fallen to this fate.

[Babyguile]

Cool thanks for sharing babe :)

It would be cooler if you put in into more of a visually poetic form like free verse and break the lines up how you please though.

[Bar22do]

Every turn I take it feels like death is watching me... waiting for me... calling me, and haunting me...

I smell his stench, I feel his claws, I even taste the putrid smell of him. I now see into the eyes that have taken those dear.

Times ticking and it cannot wait, I just hope I see those that have fallen to this fate.

I wonder if you would arrange your poem into stanzas and according to its rhythm, felt, but in need of being emphasized... Thanks for your sharing.

[sc9108]

Thanks for your nice comments.

I just wrote it in about 10 minutes :/. Didn't really think about it, just trying to draw out inspiration for a story I'm thinking of doing, and its about (obviously) death !

Not the nicest subject so I'm trying to get it in my head and puzzle it together.

another short one,

Every turn I make I know death is there, preying on my hunger for life,
eating the life out of my veins,and sucking every breath of air in my lungs.

I know there isn't an escape, I know this has become my fate.
Still I refuse, still I want to remain among the living.

No one can help me not even myself.

[sc9108]

Cool thanks for sharing babe :)

It would be cooler if you put in into more of a visually poetic form like free verse and break the lines up how you please though. thank you

[sc9108]

Heres the first scene for the story thats inspired this poem http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=50845