The girl on the bus

[Biggus]

I climbed the stairs
To the top deck
Then I found a seat
And sat
Then I heard a voice say “hi”
It was soft and gently spoken
I turned towards the voice
Which emanated from a girl
With the warmest smile
And her red hair ablaze
In the morning sun
And with her head slightly inclined
She said again “hi”
That’s all
Just “hi”
And with that simple word
Came her smiling eyes
Beneath her blazing hair
And a radiant glow
And a feeling came over me
A peaceful warm feeling
As warm as her smile
Then all at once
I felt so at ease
As if I had known her forever
Though I had seen her only once before
And did not think she had seen me
All she said was “hi”
But her tone spoke volumes
I returned her smile
And tamely said “hello”
I wanted to say so much more
She smiled again
This time with the heat
To match her flaming locks
I needed no words
As with that wondrous smile
All my questions were answered

[Sampson]

I don't have much to say in terms of critiquing your poem, but I will say that it brightened my cold and damp afternoon!! Cheers for posting man!

[MorpheusSandman]

This poem made me feel as warm and fuzzy as you describe yourself as being in that piece. This is something I think (or, at least, I hope) everyone experiences; that feeling of just having someone attractive (physically and spiritually) smile at you, say high, brush their hair out of their eyes. It's an amazing thing despite the simple, ordinariness of it all and I think you captured it here well.

[Biggus]

Thank you both

[Babyguile]

I'm with MorpheousSandman on this one.

[Bashayer]

A Fantastic Poem >>>
I wish be this girl >>>>>>>>>>
Waiting for your great Poems>>>>>>

[Bar22do]

Biggus, it is a very good poem indeed, "blushing" out of its purity, simplicity and delicacy... it reads as a highly poetic recount of an encounter.. very well written! congratulations, really.

[yunxin]

Very much like this poem, the feelings of sincere

[Biggus]

Thanks all