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hack
02-08-2010, 11:40 PM
Empty Spring spins full
tearing Winter from its naked use
Gray to green
then Riot
Delta40
02-08-2010, 11:44 PM
You have a real gift for brevity here. I feel the riot is the array of colours that deck the land. Its like a jack-in-the-box burst of joy. very picturesque
Bar22do
02-09-2010, 08:39 PM
Empty Spring spins full
tearing Winter from it's naked use
Gray to green
then Riot

and what an irresistible Riot! great! roll on springtime!

(should not it's rather be its? :seeya:)
MorpheusSandman
02-09-2010, 10:54 PM
That "Riot" really makes the piece. I also love the poetic brevity.