Darwinism

[mazHur]

Darwinism
by mazHur

No, no, it sounds like a hoax;
it’s a make-believe theory,
a coincidence of coincidences.Oh, no, I cannot believe in you,
your darned theory, Darwin,
your reasoning is fallacious!
How can Evolution transform
lower forms into higher forms
and not otherwise?
No, no, Evolution is all baloney,
all farce, all made-up story
woven from Nature’s tricky yarns
of similarities and resemblances,
of Nature’s melange fabric of secrets beyond you!
Apes are apes, men men;
heads' can't be tails
nor tails become heads;
they will remain so till eternity.
The defining line between the two
like the fix laws of Nature
Is unchangeable;
similarities (and dissimilarities)are like ghosts
superimposing some minds
to make-believe in a creature
that never exists,
that never was.
Change is for eternity,
Change is for Life,
Change is inevitable,
It can transform, I agree,
one thing for nothing
but never, yes, never,
one species to another.
Change brings change
Appearance brings disappearance,
being decomposes, decays
youth evolves into old age
old age, disease, Death!
Never have dead bones evolved
into a new Man, a new being!
Never has a lip or a nose slipped
from the face- its Original place-
to a peculiar location
other than nature hath
reserved for them;
If Evolution were true
If things evolved into new species,
Lips and eyes by now
would have been located,
on my foot,
your foot
only to bring human disgust!

[MarkBastable]

.....have you considered writing a poem about gravity?

[Babbalanja]

like ghosts
superimposing some minds
to make-believe in a creature
that never exists,
that never was.
The irony is overwhelming.

Regards.

Istvan

[MorpheusSandman]

I dunno, this seems more like a rant and less like a poem. It's way too direct, way too dry. Too few metaphors or attention to rhythmic details.

Content-wise it might have done you good to separate the theory of evolution from evolution itself. Evolution undeniably happens. The fact that science can breed new species of animals or plants is proof that evolution happens. Archeology doesn't lie either. As for the theory of evolution that explains man's origins... it may not be absolute fact but it's probably as close as we can get on the subject. You really should research the innumerable fallacies in the arguments against evolution (many of which you include in this piece).

[Kutta]

.....have you considered writing a poem about gravity?

And I'm all for a scathing critique distilled into poetry about the Copenhagen interpretation.

[mazHur]

.....have you considered writing a poem about gravity?

here it is :)

http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=50509

[Nax]

Im as much into faith as the next fella, but I believe if you are going to write a poem about evolution and Darwinism, it may be a good idea to do a fair bit of background research on the subject. The oppinions expressed are a thin representation and understanding of Darwin's actual principles on evolution.

With that being said, personal objections on information aside, I think the poem was good, but as previously stated it was rather literal, for my poetical tastes anyways. I think if you took this idea and ran with it, revised and rethought the overall concept, you could have something with far more impact to your point. Like say for instance, if the poem was written from the point of a man, or a cave man, or an animal, or even from Darwin himself.

[blazeofglory]

The ability to weave a theory of science into a poem like this is not possible without craftsmanship