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[cogs]

meager bait catches no hearts
scanty clues raise no suspicion
modest sobs echo deaf recesses
considerate cue's vital for empathy
verbosity yields deep embrace
let's expose our spirits
let's unwrap together
a gift of beautiful art

[Bar22do]

meager bait catches no hearts
scanty clues raise no suspicion
modest sobs echo deaf recesses
considerate cue's vital for empathy
verbosity yields deep embrace
let's expose our spirits
let's unwrap together
a gift of beautiful art
This echoes blnk's "words" a bit and reads as a hearted voice encouraging solidary discovery of art our spirits conceive...

[MorpheusSandman]

I'm not sure about this one; I think it left me a bit cold. I think perhaps it's the overuse of syntactic repetition in the first 5 lines that seems a bit overdone and I'm not really sure how the last 3 lines connect with all of the above. There's a certain disconnection I think...

[cogs]

perhaps i inadverdently thwarted my own point i intended- that readers may be left without clues to a poem's meaning, therefore leaving them bereft of sympathy. i thought the two lines in the middle would have been enough to transition the beginning and end. i did want my exploration into the realm of rhythm, to have some imagery as well.