Storm

[hack]

A storm of driven desert sand
An atom or two drawn from passing clay
Digested
Whirled and mixed in ancient cauldrons
Excreted
Painted on stone under the Sun's hard light
Stacked one on one,
By the patient Lord of the With and the By,
The God who only cares for stones,
And grins at small intelligences,
Contemplating, blinking away petty tears,
Dreams of love, and other passing spasms
In death throes that, though short,
Over-dramatic, last too long

[PrinceMyshkin]

A storm of driven desert sand
An atom or two drawn from passing clay
Digested
Whirled and mixed in ancient cauldrons
Excreted
Painted on stone under the Sun's hard light
Stacked one on one,
By the patient Lord of the With and the By,
The God who only cares for stones,
And grins at small intelligences,
Contemplating, blinking away petty tears,
Dreams of love, and other passing spasms
In death throes that, though short,
Over-dramatic, last too long

This is a burst of something impassioned and deep.

[Lokasenna]

Crikey! This is good stuff.

You've managed to pack a lot of vivid, powerful imagery into a short poem. It grips with what it reveals, and tantalizes with what it does not.

These lines stood out with particular force:
"Stacked one on one,
By the patient Lord of the With and the By,
The God who only cares for stones,"

[Bar22do]

A storm of driven desert sand
An atom or two drawn from passing clay
Digested
Whirled and mixed in ancient cauldrons
Excreted
Painted on stone under the Sun's hard light
Stacked one on one,
By the patient Lord of the With and the By,
The God who only cares for stones,
And grins at small intelligences,
Contemplating, blinking away petty tears,
Dreams of love, and other passing spasms
In death throes that, though short,
Over-dramatic, last too long

I would say - one of your best poems I have read, so effective, no wonder, it originates in the desert... welcome back! I didn't know you would bring news even from God!:)

[cogs]

ok, i'm betting on either humanity, or something like stonehenge.

[MorpheusSandman]

Very, very affective. There's a certain conflict in the piece between the nihilism of a God who only cares for stones and yet a kind of acceptance of our smallness and insignificance yet inability to really step outside ourselves as if we were as important as those stones. Nicely done.