When He Loves He

[Dark Muse]

When He Loves He

Tentively fingers touch
with uneven smiles,
shyly we advance into our
explorations of opposite selves,
a purity of a moment sealed
in innocent love which unfolds
like blossoms of spring
may stand condemned in the
world's eye,
but nothing can tarnish
the tenderness of your fingers
upon my face when our eyes
meet to explode in boundless eternities,
quivering as gently as a leaf
under the kiss of near still winds
our souls are free in the endless possibilities
of love born from the beauty
offered in your heart,
what little difference would be made
of like meeting like,
what little significance placed upon
joint anatomy, if the essence of
our feeling could be
seen, touched, felt,
love they say is blind,
but so to, it is sexless,
you, my everything, all the world I need,
we in sanctuary
will love for eternity
untarnished.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Aside from the "message" in this, which I endorse whole-heartedly, I'm struck by the quiet dignity of the lines and especially by these:


nothing can tarnish
the tenderness of your fingers
upon my face when our eyes
meet to explode in boundless eternities

[Silas Thorne]

I was also struck by the beauty of those lines above (within the whole context of the poem), but I wouldn't stop the quote there, and go on to include:
'quivering as gently as a leaf
under the kiss of near still winds'

I love the 'near still winds' line! The wind is waiting, still, but is not a wind until it moves.
Lovely!

Is the 'you, my everything, all the world I need,' a conscious echo of Donne, or is it just in my mind?

[Dark Muse]

Thank you for your comments, it was my intent with the poem to display a pure, simple expression of the beauty of love between two people without seeming like I was hitting anyone over the head with a sociopolitical statement, or without directly challenging someone else's belief. I just wanted love to be seen in its truest form.


Is the 'you, my everything, all the world I need,' a conscious echo of Donne, or is it just in my mind?

I haven't read much of Donne so I cannot claim that was indeed intentional on my part.

[MorpheusSandman]

I am also strongly behind the theme and really enjoyed the understated grace and beauty of its expression. Gay Rights is our generation's civil rights movement; let's hope it ends just as fairly as the previous one did.

[Dark Muse]

Thank you for your coments and here here to your thoughts!

[paperleaves]

I love the lines "quivering as gently as a leaf
under the kiss of near still winds".
This is so gentle, so pure, so benevolent, it makes me long for a lover and for pure love love love!



kate

[cogs]

it was my intent with the poem to display a pure, simple expression of the beauty of love
this is the essence i felt as i read. at first i thought it might be about someone learning to love themselves (but not learning to love pronouns).