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Theid
01-02-2010, 09:14 AM
There once was a man who dreamt.
His youth, expiring.
Escape would be nice.
Decisions to be made, the hour was prime.
If a path was not chosen, he would run out of time.
So run he did, toward the door.
But it was only a window.
And he could not escape.

Maryd.
01-02-2010, 09:16 AM
No where to run...

PrinceMyshkin
01-02-2010, 11:47 AM
After that sequence of relatively flat, authoritative stauements, the poem seems to cry out for a rhyming couplet to conclude it.

nightshifft
01-03-2010, 12:51 AM
i know the feeling i have no escape and no where to run

Maryd.
01-03-2010, 01:48 AM
i know the feeling i have no escape and no where to run

You and me both... Nightshift