Your wet hair

[Free Falcon]

My life during night
Is a dry desert
So, I am thirsty for an oasis
In your wet hair
Which moist my soul
Like a soft rain
When it is raining in May
My soul then is like a wet swallow
Which gets shaken
And protrudes its wings
Drunk by your fragrance
It flies high
Toward the horizons
Of your lovely eyes

[paperleaves]

If I may ask, where did you get the inspiration for this, if it came from a specific place at all! It is a beautiful image filled expression:)

love
Kate

[Dinkleberry2010]

free falcon, this is a good poem which I found to be quite lovely. To use paperleaves' words: "it is a beautiful image-filled expression."

[Haunted]

I agree, it's a lovely piece. It sounds genuine and comes from your heart. And if I read it in context with you as the Free Falcon, the bird imagery completes itself.

[Free Falcon]

If I may ask, where did you get the inspiration for this, if it came from a specific place at all! It is a beautiful image filled expression:)

love
Kate
Good morning Kate
Though know that it is night there :)
It didn`t come from a specific place but from a specific moment of feeling
Thank you for your reading and comment :)

[Free Falcon]

free falcon, this is a good poem which I found to be quite lovely. To use paperleaves' words: "it is a beautiful image-filled expression."
Thanks alot
Glad to read your positive opinion

[Free Falcon]

I agree, it's a lovely piece. It sounds genuine and comes from your heart. And if I read it in context with you as the Free Falcon, the bird imagery completes itself.
Thank you Haunted
It is a pleasure to read your comment

[Free Falcon]

Dear friends
I also wouldlike to thank my friend Hack , who suggests me this better variant
My life during night
is a desert
So, I am thirsty for an oasis
in your wet hair
It moistens my soul
like a soft May rain
My soul then, a wet swallow
with shaken and protruding wings
Drunk by your fragrance
it flies high
Toward the horizon
of your lovely eyes
Thanks to everyone who corrects my mistake and helps me to improve my (poetic) english
I love you all

[Haunted]

Free Falcon, the changes are good, it tightens up the poem and makes it more effective as it gets right down to the feeling itself without repetitive distractions. You have the right person at your side, Hack is a master in tightening stuff down to its quintessence.

[Free Falcon]

Free Falcon, the changes are good, it tightens up the poem and makes it more effective as it gets right down to the feeling itself without repetitive distractions. You have the right person at your side, Hack is a master in tightening stuff down to its quintessence.
Thank you Haunted
Too kind of you