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Isitandthink
12-23-2009, 11:39 PM
Who shall speak to my soul in this lonely hour?

Love has thus turned into a stranger.

Some claim that silence begets strength and power,

it too has brought me solitude's slumber.

whitman
02-25-2010, 04:05 AM
Slightly cliched and a strained attempt at trying to be poetic.

Buh4Bee
02-25-2010, 10:38 AM
I think you make a reflective point that speaks poetically.

MorpheusSandman
02-25-2010, 08:18 PM
It is a bit too cliched but I think the real problem is that for this kind of melancholic heaviness it helps to put it in the context of a larger poem where you can build up towards it instead of making it so short and one-dimensional.