cute angel
12-21-2009, 12:33 PM
Hello everybody,
How are you,hope you are doing good?
Any way ,this is my newest poem it's fresh I wrote it 5 minutes ago:D lol so if there is any thing to add to it or omit from it plz tell me ,coz I'm in need of constructive criticism.
Here is the poem
Enjoy it
Whispers of a lonely heart
In the dark,where there is no light,
I heard faint whispers of a lonely heart,
Weeping,crying with all his mighT
I'm dead,my whole life is falling apart
I said:
For God's sake
stop that sorrowful ache
why are you so sad?
What drove you so mad?
Look at you,you look so bad(I mean his state):(
He shed his tears and said:
WHo are you?
..................Are you an angel?
..........................................Am I dead?
I said with a soft smile
No,you are on the banks of the NAIL
Look at that far candle about a mile
Can you see it?
He said :yes; I do
It's the candle of hope
with it you can be attached to life with a strong rope
It never fades or blows off
but sometimes gets stronger and other times weaker
All you have to do ,is to look inside you
Believe in yourself and you can touch the moon by noon
21.12.09
How are you,hope you are doing good?
Any way ,this is my newest poem it's fresh I wrote it 5 minutes ago:D lol so if there is any thing to add to it or omit from it plz tell me ,coz I'm in need of constructive criticism.
Here is the poem
Enjoy it
Whispers of a lonely heart
In the dark,where there is no light,
I heard faint whispers of a lonely heart,
Weeping,crying with all his mighT
I'm dead,my whole life is falling apart
I said:
For God's sake
stop that sorrowful ache
why are you so sad?
What drove you so mad?
Look at you,you look so bad(I mean his state):(
He shed his tears and said:
WHo are you?
..................Are you an angel?
..........................................Am I dead?
I said with a soft smile
No,you are on the banks of the NAIL
Look at that far candle about a mile
Can you see it?
He said :yes; I do
It's the candle of hope
with it you can be attached to life with a strong rope
It never fades or blows off
but sometimes gets stronger and other times weaker
All you have to do ,is to look inside you
Believe in yourself and you can touch the moon by noon
21.12.09