On A Poet Turning Thirty-Nine

[Dinkleberry2010]

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[PrinceMyshkin]

I thought that the last verse - beautiful though it is - was a rather shift in emphasis, as if everything that had come before was just sort of you clearing your throat before you could say what was really on your mind.

[Bar22do]

He wishes he were twenty to make it up to this emerald-eyed girl with honey hair - laws of relativity are here at work... and yes, you did convey how important that was. Thanks..

[Buh4Bee]

Marvelous!

Your ending is connected to tha last poem you posted:
www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=49219

No?

[Dinkleberry2010]

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Oh, I am a bit afraid of long poems, haha... But yours pulls one to continue from top to bottom without getting tired. It is full of familiar pictures that warm the peotical spirit of mine. Thanks for sharing.

[Dinkleberry2010]

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[MorpheusSandman]

While I somewhat agree with Prince about the last line I think everything leading up to it is masterful and verging on a kind of minor-masterpiece. I can only hope that at that age I will be able to look back on my life and 'output' and be able to express my experiences half as eloquently. This is truly a superb piece and I'm highly impressed.

[Lumiere]

I absolutely love the paragraph that begins: "For he's looked the tiger in the eyes..." Such powerful imagery! And "wallowed in mountain dew" makes me want to live, (not that I don't want to as of now, but that makes me REALLY want to live. That's the power of words.) On the whole, a superbly human and spirited poem. The shift of emphasis in the final line was unexpected, certainly, but I rather liked it. It gave it that final touch, you know. Wonderful piece, Jermac.

[Alexander III]

A lovely piece on looking back at what has been and what could have been. However if I may, I believe "decaying body" comes of as to harsh and brutal for one who is only 39

[Dinkleberry2010]

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[PrinceMyshkin]

You may be right about "decaying body" being too harsh and brutal--I'm trying to think of a synonym (besides "rotting") for decaying that would suggest the same idea.

To me, it wasn't so much that it was harsh or brutal as that it was kind of predictably self-pitying, but then I'm looking at age 39 from a much older vantage point and there's an almost reflex, silent You think your body is decaying?!

For maybe similar reasons, I wasn't crazy about the reference to "midriff bulge."

[Dinkleberry2010]

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