Cimmaron

[hack]

and leaving Eden
the cool stream of God's reason
pooled and disappeared

[Bar22do]

mysterious -- was first Gods reason's cool stream in Eden? and where did it disappear --- inside what it pooled? back in Eden? in both? you see, three short line and a world of reflection - thank you.

[Pendragon]

Nice! You say a lot with just a few words. Brilliant!

[hack]

I must admit (with some embarrassment ) that I have, as is my wont, misspelled the title. If it was not so integral to the poem, I would not mention it. The title was to be Cimarron, which has more than one meaning, two of them are appropriate to the piece. It is both a wild, untamed place, as the world outside Eden would have surely been, and it is a name given to escaped slaves (as you could argue, the first human inhabitants of that wild place were). I should not post just before I sleep or when I first awake. I post so late sometimes because it helps me to let go of an idea and sleep comes easier. In the morning sleep or dreams may have distilled some thought and, in my haste to capture that, I am prone to make silly mistakes. My apologies, I think that, in the future, I will try to use more paper and more discretion.

[Alexander III]

Very well done, allot of meaning and sentiment is expressed in such a short form.