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MorpheusSandman
12-11-2009, 07:50 PM
What time is it there?

Will these distant thoughts
Divide the time
Between you and I?
The decrepit hands on clocks
Tick on; The noose
Is strung up by the minutes
Helplessly I’m hung
Left to suffocate unless the
Feet of my evil
Executioner will march
Backwards

What time is it there?

Waiting for inevitable death
The deviant sundown
Shines on; The amber
Glints on the guillotine
Or sharpened reaper’s scythe
Which descends
With the precision of a
Surgeon’s scalpel
To perform this wordless
Tracheotomy

What time is it there?

And I wonder at my smallness
This extant existence
What creeps between seconds
When money won’t buy
A single minute
Just dream of demons that eat
The light of life
Who can swim through shadows?
Reach the furthest
Shore of stilling time

What time is it there?

For a fleeting moment
I thought
I saw you lucent in the
Last light
Of the fading horizon
An ageless angel; my savior
Where are you
Now?
And I wonder, I wonder
What are you doing
Now?
And I wonder, I wonder
I hope you sleep
Like me
In the comfort of eternity
And I wonder, I wonder

As the hands have lain down on their lap
Resting in the sifting dust
These two lambencies that skip across the surface
Falter to a weakened walk
Then a crawl
Then
Are
Still
And still I wonder

What time is it there?

Buh4Bee
12-11-2009, 10:51 PM
Morpheus- She must have been your angel. Write on sir, write on... the expression of your love is for the one you lost is genuinely felt by me.

Pendragon
12-12-2009, 11:13 AM
Love the leading stanza and the repeated line is sheer genius!

http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l108/AbsalomKane/Smilies/Yes.gif

MorpheusSandman
12-15-2009, 03:23 AM
Thanks to jersea and Pendragon. If I was to criticize myself I think it's too melodramatic compared to what I intended; which was something more ephemeral and elliptical. I might work on it.

PrinceMyshkin
12-15-2009, 12:30 PM
If I was to criticize myself I think it's too melodramatic compared to what I intended; which was something more ephemeral and elliptical. I might work on it.

Don't agree with you on the excessive melodrama in this. Any temptation to bathos or to anything lachrymose was held well in check by the elegance of your lines. What a marvelous poem!

MorpheusSandman
12-17-2009, 11:54 PM
Thanks for the vote of confidence, Prince!