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DanBierce
12-10-2009, 10:58 PM
Feathers may have been
the final refuge of the dinosaur.
An old neighbor in her bamboo blind
dwells on theories such as this.

Feeders hung around her pond
lure finch and sparrow remnants
of down-sized monsters who perch
within inches of her frame, bent now
and shorter since the time she sang
and whimmed by night with lovers;
flinched through work by day.

The birds leave as she stands
and walks across her lawn;
stops to curse weeds grown thick
where tar pits may have plagued
her slope-browed and wingless kin.

neilgee
12-11-2009, 09:07 AM
Really like this, Dan.

Buh4Bee
12-11-2009, 10:42 AM
Dan, I hope you get some of these published. They are so great. Nice scene!

firefangled
12-11-2009, 11:50 AM
You are an excellent poet, DanBierce! Your subjects are viewed from an interesting point of view and always handled with truly original language and images.

PrinceMyshkin
12-11-2009, 03:47 PM
Not just "whimmed" and "finched," but it is as if every word you use in this is newly coined. It's a SPLENDID poem! Thank you...

Bar22do
12-11-2009, 06:12 PM
Original, set in this primeval scenery of unhurried times and places - amazingly rich and beautiful! thank you!

Pendragon
12-12-2009, 11:15 AM
I like this, Dan. Very thought provoking!

DanBierce
12-13-2009, 09:05 PM
Thanks for all the kind praises on this, guys. I might self-publish a little book of these someday if I ever get them to where I really want them. Seems like never, maybe, but I enjoy working on them, so I'm getting rewarded.