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haymanali
12-04-2009, 06:21 PM
Your upper lip is love
your lower lip is deep death
they both devour me

Virgil
12-04-2009, 06:35 PM
:lol: Interesting. There's something to that. :)

Haunted
12-04-2009, 06:41 PM
I love it!

Lumiere
12-04-2009, 07:45 PM
This makes me "Hmmm." I cannot decide if I love it or hate it. Perhaps that's the point.....

Buh4Bee
12-04-2009, 10:34 PM
love it. I give it a high brow and a low brow wink!

skib
12-05-2009, 12:40 AM
I thought it was going to be a poem about sticking your tongue out at someone. :D

paperleaves
12-05-2009, 01:53 AM
I don't know if I like the use of "deep death", I think you could have used something different and profoundly increased the emotional effect, but the simplicity and wonder that you have captured in this poem is something to admire and I love how you've accomplished that! Fantastic work :)


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Virgil
12-05-2009, 02:02 AM
There's something so melodramatically wonderful about that "deep death" that it makes the poem for me. :D

haymanali
12-05-2009, 02:45 PM
@ Virgil

@ Haunted

@ Lumiere

@ jersea

@ skib

@ paperleaves

Thanks a lot for your observations, comments and appreciations.