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PrinceMyshkin
12-04-2009, 10:19 AM
One man wrote because his heart was broken
and he hoped to mend it, a little,
by crying out injustice and his
intolerable pain.
Another man wrote
about joy, transcendence, love,
which he wanted to make a gift of
to all the world, but
it was the same man,
writing the same poem.
Bar22do
12-04-2009, 11:10 AM
You are, each time, more and more astonishing... your ability to catch worlds in few lines, beauty of those lines, sadness and joy speaking of human condition, fragility and strengths...; like I recently heard songs from a distant country, one was an unbearable shout of break following a disaster, soon after, a song of seasons faithfully coming back, then one of joy of youth, still another of that young girl promised to an old man who cried about injustice before the judges.... and it was all a treasure of one nation, so beaten by fate.
For what my opinion is worth, I already wrote your poems were incredibly good and beautiful... what should I call this one - perhaps marvelous - for "perfect" sounds dry.
Thank you for every word and comma of it.
PrinceMyshkin
12-04-2009, 11:18 AM
You are, each time, more and more astonishing... your ability to catch worlds in few lines, beauty of those lines, sadness and joy speaking of human condition, fragility and strengths...; like I recently heard songs from a distant country, one was an unbearable shout of break following a disaster, soon after, a song of seasons faithfully coming back, then one of joy of youth, still another of that young girl promised to an old man who cried about injustice before the judges.... and it was all a treasure of one nation, so beaten by fate.
For what my opinion is worth, I already wrote your poems were incredibly good and beautiful... what should I call this one - perhaps marvelous - for "perfect" sounds dry.
Thank you for every word and comma of it.
But what can your opinion be "worth"? If I were writing this or any other for a competition and you were on the panel of judges, your opinion would be worth one out of the total number of judges...
As it is, I write for the pleasure of saying something I hope is worth saying and of saying it as well as I can, so the opinion - good or bad - of any reader is worth a lot to me, and I'd be falsely modest if I understated how much understanding and enthusiasm like yours means to me.
Obligado
Jerry
symphony
12-04-2009, 11:55 AM
Jer, you write these small ones so strong that they stick...to...my...head...and i....cant...just...get...them...off! Argh!
Every time. Every time. If i'm reading one in the morning i'll be sure to come back and read again in the evening.
Every time, every time, dear friend.
Wonderful, Prince! I always enjoy your pieces.
paperleaves
12-04-2009, 12:40 PM
Yet again, you've mastered your incredible ability to peer into the inexplicable depths of our psyche and explain them. Such beautiful work, Jer. Thanks :)
love
paper
Virgil
12-04-2009, 01:51 PM
Very good. :)
PrinceMyshkin
12-05-2009, 06:54 PM
Jer, you write these small ones so strong that they stick...to...my...head...and i....cant...just...get...them...off! Argh!
Every time. Every time. If i'm reading one in the morning i'll be sure to come back and read again in the evening.
Every time, every time, dear friend.
What a wonderful compliment - or several compliments! Thank you.
Anna_MAlkovych
12-06-2009, 05:43 AM
I didn't see it coming, kind of brilliant, like both the way it written and the meaning. I will be waiting for your net ones with anticipation.
PrinceMyshkin
12-06-2009, 10:45 AM
I didn't see it coming, kind of brilliant, like both the way it written and the meaning. I will be waiting for your net ones with anticipation.
Many thanks. As you may be able to tell, it was a pleasure to write.
Sampson
12-06-2009, 12:33 PM
i have never come across a poet other than yourself who can use three short stanzas to such shattering effect. once again you have stopped me in my tracks and posted something which i find it hard to do anything other than fawn over!
ampoule
12-07-2009, 09:17 AM
Many thanks. As you may be able to tell, it was a pleasure to write.
The pleasure was all mine.....well.....and a good dozen others. :)
Pendragon
12-07-2009, 10:46 AM
it was the same man,
writing the same poem.
Excellent wrap-up for a great poem
PrinceMyshkin
12-08-2009, 01:09 PM
Many thanks, Skib, Virgil, Ampoule, Sampson & Pendragon.
i have never come across a poet other than yourself who can use three short stanzas to such shattering effect. once again you have stopped me in my tracks and posted something which i find it hard to do anything other than fawn over!
"Fawn," if you must, but if the succinctness of this or any other of my poems appeals to you, it may well be that you sense the ability and the wish to employ that same mode in yourself.
Best wishes,
Jerry
ur_shadow89
12-10-2009, 02:00 PM
it was the same man,
writing the same poem.
Very striking ending... just love it! :thumbs_up:thumbs_up
Buh4Bee
12-10-2009, 09:20 PM
Prince,
I didn't react the same way at first as the others. I needed to read it a few times to really appreciate the complexity of the poem. I hate when your poems do that to me. Sometimes they can appear much less than they are. Thanks for sharing this with me.
PrinceMyshkin
12-11-2009, 11:26 AM
Prince,
I didn't react the same way at first as the others. I needed to read it a few times to really appreciate the complexity of the poem. I hate when your poems do that to me. Sometimes they can appear much less than they are. Thanks for sharing this with me.
Not all poems are meant to be gotten at one reading although, as much as possible, I avoid complexity for the sake of complexity. That you came back to read it again and again must mean that something struck you as being worth pursuing. Thanks for persevering, Jersea.
And thank you too, ur shadow89.
firefangled
12-11-2009, 12:03 PM
A testament to our complexity.
PrinceMyshkin
12-11-2009, 04:40 PM
A testament to our complexity.
All the more reason, I submit, to sing:
'Tis the gift to be simple, 'tis the gift to be free,
'Tis the gift to come down where we ought to be,
And when we find ourselves in the place just right,
'Twill be in the valley of love and delight.
When true simplicity is gain'd,
To bow and to bend we shan't be asham'd,
To turn, turn will be our delight,
Till by turning, turning we come round right.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vxyosV_WqdI
dibyendra
12-13-2009, 11:28 AM
I admire your ability to craft poems like this which are short but have powerful imageries! Very good work!
formality hater
12-15-2009, 04:36 PM
Very nice!
PrinceMyshkin
12-16-2009, 11:52 AM
Very nice!
Thanks, formality hater.
Captain_Kuchiki
12-17-2009, 12:15 PM
Awesome poem!
PrinceMyshkin
12-18-2009, 11:38 AM
Awesome poem!
Thanks a lot.
MorpheusSandman
12-20-2009, 04:41 AM
Jer, you write these small ones so strong that they stick...to...my...head...and i....cant...just...get...them...off! Argh!
Every time. Every time. If i'm reading one in the morning i'll be sure to come back and read again in the evening.
Every time, every time, dear friend.This.
I'm not sure I have anything constructive to add to all the praise.
PrinceMyshkin
12-20-2009, 01:44 PM
Many thanks, Dibyendra and Morpheus.
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