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cogs
11-17-2009, 12:57 AM
hypnotized by the flame
reflected in your eyes
a glaze crystalized
and i whisper your name

pure fire symbolizes
the movement inside
our touch oxydizes
our atoms collide

slow love...

lay down in slow motion
our lips meet in the air
like the gulls on the ocean
with your flowing hair

moving in our hearts
is the wind unseen
these two ships never part
you know what i mean

slow love...

time flies when you're with me
the sun soon arises
the moon drops goodbyes
as all the stars flee

fire has burned down low
smoke just floats above
i try to speak my love
but you've turned to go

slow love...

baby slow down for me

slow love...

slow down this time for me

slow love...

i love you can't you see

slow love...

but you know how slow to be...

loki456
11-17-2009, 02:10 AM
I'm going to be honest, I don't know too much about poetry, the different styles, or the writing proforma's. But I really enjoyed it, I am a male and heterosexual and found this to be one of the most intense portayal's of human emotion. I am a fan of edgar allan poe, and so I would take this as a great compliment considering the stark differences between the two of you.
keep writing, and I'm showing my girlfriend this one when she gets home, too bad it didn't come from me, if you know what i mean - ewww inuendo is so unbecoming :P

Sampson
11-17-2009, 03:12 PM
thats f***ing dope man... i have nothing but admiration for your penmanship!

cogs
11-17-2009, 05:11 PM
i wrote this after inspiration from dave koz's remake of 'careless whisper' by george michael. i wrote it as a song, but didn't write the bridge yet. honestly, i wrote it with sampson's style in mind. loki, innuendo is what it's about... lol. thank you both.

Sampson
11-17-2009, 05:16 PM
with my style in mind? though the similarities did strike me i didn't think you would have written it with my style in mind... that's a real compliment cogs, thank you

~Sophia~
11-17-2009, 08:00 PM
innuendo - crescendo! I'd love to hear it put to music!