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~Sophia~
11-14-2009, 05:25 PM
Emergency Exit

You’d think an experienced undertaker
would have known to nail it down - set it in stone
would have known not to bury it in the quicksand

behind my eyes, a shootout (a wetting)
everything good is wet. The blushing egg, nativity,
------------- an opal rain-swollen channel, tongues in a dirty kiss
--------------bathing, champagne, everything good is wet

sweat soaked tourniquet
my nocturnal hands pulling me out by the nape
(grateful he forgot to remove the noose)
I want to swing again

dressed in my best tux, fishnets, spikes, top hat, cane
moulin tilt and dizzy ruby sky pirouette
into the vacant side of my anomaly
into the city of sight(s). Into
the Mystique.

paperleaves
11-16-2009, 12:32 AM
i love the (i hope you don't take offense to this word choice) gaudy fashion description in the last stanza--exquisite, indeed! and the "everything good is wet" stanza...absolutely true and vibrant and full of life!


love
paper

~Sophia~
11-16-2009, 12:42 AM
LOL... no offense. It is my "Puttin on the Ritz" or "Cabaret" costume as I exit this side of the Atlantic. LOL... picture a sky hook yanking me off this stage! I will be living fairly close to the Moulin Rouge and my school girl anticipation is getting the best of me LOL.

The wetness of Paris this time of year sounds good to me after 7 months in the desert!

xo

ampoule
11-16-2009, 08:51 AM
Like a slip 'n slide...I hope your emergency exit is a slick one...like this one :'

DanBierce
11-16-2009, 10:00 AM
Very fine read, Sophia. One of your best, IMO. Especially like the sounds in this:

dressed in my best tux, fishnets, spikes, top hat, cane
moulin tilt and dizzy ruby sky pirouette
into the vacant side of my anomaly
into the city of sight(s). Into
the Mystique.

firefangled
11-16-2009, 06:13 PM
Amazing sounds, images and rhymes. A feast for the senses.

~Sophia~
11-16-2009, 09:44 PM
Hey ampoule! Is that what that shuffle is called LOL? Thanks for reading and commenting!

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Thanks Dan. I can't wait to start writing about my experiences there. For now, I'm just pacing - pacing - pacing

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You are always so kind ff! And btw, your last poem really makes me want to fall in love again. Thank you!

cogs
11-17-2009, 07:14 PM
very intriguing images... i was thinking of the windmill in the picture reeling in the 'noose', so you can 'swing again'. i would like to understand the 'vacant side of my anomaly'.

~Sophia~
11-17-2009, 07:36 PM
Hi cogs! Thanks for reading. As for your question, well, I'm one of those right brian/left brain people. There really is two of me. I spent most of my adult life (to-date) in the left hemisphere. Pragmatic, business executive, budgets, graphs, charts, logic, responsible, on time, etc etc but all through that,

there were little glimpses into the creative side. The occasional painting, writing (the last couple of years), being drawn to galleries and poets like a moth to a flame (sorry, I know....cliche) etc. In this piece, that's the vacant side. The right hemisphere. The place I now need to fill.

cogs
11-17-2009, 07:56 PM
thank you! that's great that you're exploring that side!

~Sophia~
11-18-2009, 01:04 AM
:D unfortunately, disposing of my left brain probably means I'll end up living under a bridge :lol:

free
12-04-2009, 06:07 AM
Yes, I agree with DanBierce about the part which I, also, think is the best.

symphony
12-04-2009, 12:00 PM
Beautiful!

Upon reading all your poems here in LitNet, I really really wish I could write again some day soon... Havent written anything in ages and its killing me.

~Sophia~
12-04-2009, 01:24 PM
Thanks Free!!!!

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Symphony, I think I know what you mean. I was able to write about Paris before getting here but now, it's so spectacular, so overwhelming I'm afraid I can't do it justice and, have not had a single line I'm happy with come to mind. Maybe when I stop being so starry eyed and in love with this city, I'll relax into writing! Thanks for taking the time to read my poems! (I have started sketching though... somehow that's less intimidating LOL).

symphony
12-04-2009, 01:52 PM
Mind sharing them sketches? I know you paint and have long wanted to see some of your works (I only know your paintings through your poems). Do you perhaps already share them anywhere here? Blog, General chat, etc? If not, may I ask for the honor?

Meanwhile, enjoy the imponderable joy of the city of love and light!

Buh4Bee
12-05-2009, 12:16 PM
A little Moulin Rouge Action?

I can see the artists and Toulouse-Lautre.

Is it a thrill to be alive?

~Sophia~
12-05-2009, 12:56 PM
Salut symphony! Sharing a sketch would be like sharing an unfinished poem. Sorry! But, I am planning on using a sketch to write a poem... soon as I find some time. Today is my one week anniversary in Paris! This city is so full of life it is difficult to stay indoors and concentrate! If you are interested there are a few samples of my paintings on my profile in the photo section. I'm not a commercial artist so no, I don't have a website. I mostly paint for sanity, friends and family LOL.

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Ça va jersea! It is an absolute thrill to be here and alive! I'm in my version of heaven.