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DanBierce
11-12-2009, 12:01 AM
All I own would not fill a trunk, and my gut
holds neither god nor demon
since the boarding-up of my faith's poor shack.
The demagnetization of the compass my father
left behind as he sailed away on his warship
has nixed my direction. All roads are forked;
lead to air, water, and dirt dead ends.

I cannot worship the trees or rocks or hills
since I've witnessed them being wrecked
and thieved by master hoarders and poets
who speak of silent seas. The sea is never silent
except to those who dwell inland from its smash
and hiss. I'm weary of liars and the love piled
on their images by household sages.

If I could find a timer I would set it. Let its
tick torment those who never want to leave
this year or the next to someone else. The ding
would smack of finality and smooth-faced tombstones
stacked for the engraver's eye and hand. The spark
behind his spectacles, kept bright by his muse,
would blind the naive angel who would try to intervene.

PrinceMyshkin
11-12-2009, 11:03 AM
Picking out some favourite lines from among this sumptuous feast of words and images is like looking for one particular gem from among a jeweller's hoard, but these:


If I could find a timer I would set it. Let its
tick torment those who never want to leave
this year or the next to someone else. The ding
would smack of finality and smooth-faced tombstones
stacked for the engraver's eye and hand. The spark
behind his spectacles, kept bright by his muse,
would blind the naive angel who would try to intervene.

stand out even among the whole of this brilliant poem.

paperleaves
11-12-2009, 02:28 PM
Wow, Dan. I can't pick out specific lines that spoke to me, because if I did, I'd pick them all. I am mesmerized by your ability to convey such stunning images, in such incredible amounts, with seemingly incredible ease.
Thanks for sharing
love
paper

Sampson
11-12-2009, 03:11 PM
Dan, this poem evokes some incredibly vivid images for me. There is a sense of frustration to it which really rang true to me...

~Sophia~
11-12-2009, 08:15 PM
Another winner Dan. If I had to choose, the first stanza is my favorite... and within that stanza, the 3rd line is killer!

DanBierce
11-13-2009, 09:31 AM
Thanks again, folks. Glad it works well for you. PaperLeaves: These don't really "come that easy" for me. I work on them and edit many, many times. I'll probably edit this some more as I notice things that I think could be better.

"The best way to kill a poem is to publish it."