Design for life

[Biggus]

DESIGN FOR LIFE

When you look out
Across the cityscape
The first impression is one of planning
With order and method
A systematic landscape
Above a thriving community
Running as a well oiled machine
Every element doing its part
A symbiotic relationship
Every person a cog in the machine
A perpetual entity
Evolving and changing
Redesigning itself
Outside the conurbation
As if in stark contrast
The country side and nature
Appear chaotic and haphazard
Without order or method
Simple and ordinary
Lacking the sophistication of civilization
But in reality the urbanites live in chaos
Dysfunctional and self-destructive
While in nature there is structure and order
And the closer you observe it
The more of its complexities
And intricate structures are revealed
Everything precision engineered
With order and purpose
Every organism contains nature’s code
The building blocks of our world
And of our universe
True sophistication exists at every level
Complex and extraordinary
So let man builds his cities
While God builds everything else

[cogs]

great subject for a poem... i like how i gained a different perspective on my screenname... the last line is poetic

[Biggus]

Thank you

[blazeofglory]

Of course everything is amazing as if there is an architect in nature.

[MorpheusSandman]

I love the idea but I think the execution could use a bit of work. For instance, this is a perfect instance where you could use form to enhance what you're saying; use highly structured maybe even rhetorical language to relate the order, and then break down into free-verse to represent chaos, back to a structure to relate order. Maybe find a way to represent and depict chaos/order through the language and indirectly instead of simply coming out "saying" that the city is order but the people chaos/the country is seeming chaos but actually order. Work on the play of the micro and macro views, etc.

Again, this is a wonderful concept that I'd highly recommend developing in terms of the form, language, and imagery.

[Biggus]

Thanks Blaze and thanks for the tips Morpheus