My heart sings your song

[qimissung]

You with a guitar and your joie de vivre
me with a pen and a melancholy air
your hands finding me in the dark
the scent of lemons and lily of the valley

we clasp each other and the rope
climb upward to the tower
clutch the thunderous notes
swing out and back,
my heart escapes and sings your song

and your eyes staring from the mirrored glass
the darkness behind them echoes in my ears
the fragile crystal shatters

your hands, I pray, will find me, again,
in the warm dark that we pull around our ears
the moon will creep in and drown us in cool silver
come back, lamb, let the ivy grow
Climbing the tendrils of my heart

[cogs]

i identify with the image of the eyes echoing. this poem almost brings them back.

[skib]

Nothing more to say but it is very beautiful, qimissung!

[Father]

Wow, that is amazing imagery!
Thank you for posting!

[blazeofglory]

Beautiful with metaphors of nature, and there is no doubt the poem enthralls the reader

[PrinceMyshkin]

The passionate beauty of the whole of this

come back, lamb, let the ivy grow
Climbing the tendrils of my heart

is compressed and so nakedly expressed in these wonderful last lines!

[~Sophia~]

Beautiful liquid voice here quim!

[DanielBenoit]

What else can be said? Why is it that after reading almost every poem of yours that I am tempted to add it to the 'Favorite Poems from Littnetters' thread?

There are so many little bits of greatness.



me with a pen and a melancholy air




clutch the thunderous notes
swing out and back,




come back, lamb, let the ivy grow


My only problem is the 'and' in



the darkness behind them echoes in my ears and
the fragile crystal shatters


It would sound a lot more morose and silent without it.


Either way, I always feel drowning myself in your images whenever reading your poems :)

[MorpheusSandman]

Wonderful, sensuous language and imagery. I always enjoy reading your stuff qim. The only thing I miss with this piece that I so often get with your stuff is a great sense of mystery; this one does seem a bit straight-forward, but I think it works.

[qimissung]

Thank you cogs, thank you skib, Father, blazeofglory, Prince (:)), Sophia, for taking the time to read and comment.

And thank you, DanielBenoit. That may be the greatest swinging out over a great emptiness and swinging back there ever is, to have you say that. It takes my breath away. Yours, too, you know. I took the 'and' out. :)

And Morpheus, I hadn't thought about it, but I guess you're right. I really do like a mystery and I have written a great deal of poetry that is somewhat oblique. It's how I like it, as Bond prefers his martinis, "Stirred, not shaken." That little caveat at the end..."I think it works." I hate to disappoint. :) This says what I wanted to express, so I will have to think about that.