teenager

[Delta40]

I see her freckles hid
neath face powder
as she develops
further away
from the child
who she often pleads
to stay
for a teddy bear minute today

Yet in the blink
of a mascara eye
she brushes the furry side away
tomorrow

[PrinceMyshkin]

I see her freckles hid
neath face powder
as she develops
further away
from the child
who she often pleads
to stay
for a teddy bear minute today

Yet in the blink
of a mascara eye
she brushes the furry side away
tomorrow

You are really parsing these vivid portraits down to their minimal essentials! I found that final "tomorrow" a bit awkward, but the first stanza in particular is tight as a drumhead.

[Delta40]

I thought about the awkwardness of 'tomorrow' but it seemed to match the difficulty of adolesence

[MorpheusSandman]

Absolutely lovely Delta. You seem to be quite superb at these short form poems. I love the "for a teddy bear minute today" line.