Rain

[Zeniyama]

A little poem I wrote with an abrupt ending. A little melancholy, but not quite depressing.

I'll get back to writing some nicer poems, soon.
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Grass:
Wet.

Fresh mourning dew;
Teardrops
From the sky...
Weeping
At some loss.

He wears a crape
Gray and cold,
Like smooth polished metal,
And his sobs are loud;
Loud enough
To shake the very Earth
Beneath my feet.

Why do you weep,
Sad sky?
Is there something
Bothering you?

[Dark Muse]

This is such a lovely poem about the rain. I really enjoyed the way in which you ended it, there was a meloncholy feel to it I thought.

[blazeofglory]

A little poem I wrote with an abrupt ending. A little melancholy, but not quite depressing.

I'll get back to writing some nicer poems, soon.
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Grass:
Wet.

Fresh mourning dew;
Teardrops
From the sky...
Weeping
At some loss.

He wears a crape
Gray and cold,
Like smooth polished metal,
And his sobs are loud;
Loud enough
To shake the very Earth
Beneath my feet.

Why do you weep,
Sad sky?
Is there something
Bothering you?
Very mirthful metaphors. Metaphorical poems are really interesting reads. They never bore you

[Pendragon]

Why do you weep,
Sad sky?
Is there something
Bothering you?

This last line is so heart rening beautiful

[skib]

Very well wrapped up! I like it.

[paperleaves]

The last line is so beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
love
kate

[dibyendra]

I liked this one as well. Last line is quite beautiful. It's really a nice poem.

[Zeniyama]

Thank you all for the positive feedback. I try to express myself as freely and sincerely as I can, and hearing good things about my poetic expressions makes me feel all warm inside.