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PrinceMyshkin
10-18-2009, 10:19 AM
My powers grow weak
as my needs remain strong.
Life wields a shoddy scale.

Money can’t buy happiness
but the poor get their misery
wholesale.
cogs
10-18-2009, 05:33 PM
it seems in capitalism, we're always trying to get to the other side of the scale. good subject for a poem.
PrinceMyshkin
10-23-2009, 10:01 AM
Many thanks, Cogs...
paperleaves
10-25-2009, 12:42 AM
if I were an Arawak
I would have killed Columbus
so there would be no scale.





this is really beautiful, Jer.
love,
Kate
ampoule
10-25-2009, 08:05 PM
and sometimes I am so poor.
Virgil
10-25-2009, 08:38 PM
It has a nice ring to it. The rhyme works well here. :)
a_little_wisp
10-26-2009, 04:13 AM
It's the truth, it's the truth. There are people near and dear to me who have always had to scrape for pennies, who are kind to people when others say they can't afford to be. They deserve so much more."Life wields a shoddy scale." Shyea.
PrinceMyshkin
10-26-2009, 07:07 PM
Thanks, paperleaves, Virgil, Ampoule and a_little_wisp...
MorpheusSandman
10-26-2009, 11:50 PM
Those first two lines are very reminiscent of something that I can't put my finger on... any particular inspiration for those? The second stanza reminds me of this bit from As You Like It: "he that wants money, / means and content is without three good friends."
Granny5
10-27-2009, 10:34 AM
Prince, I like this. It reminds me of me...always poor and needy no matter how weak my powers become.
VulpesFulva
10-27-2009, 11:03 AM
Reminds me of this:
You say that money, isnt everything,
But Id like to see you live without it,
You think you can keep on going living like a king,
Oohh babe, but I strongly doubt it,

Tomorrow by Silverchair

It is true. And it's not fair. But it's life. Such is the agony of aspiring authors.
firefangled
10-27-2009, 11:41 AM
I like the imbalance of the stanzas. Nice work.

As far as life's scale I can think of three letters to replace, but how do you pronounce sh***y?
PrinceMyshkin
10-27-2009, 12:04 PM
Prince, I like this. It reminds me of me...always poor and needy no matter how weak my powers become.

Granny? Is it you? Is it really, really you... have you put your knitting aside?
Granny5
10-27-2009, 12:11 PM
Put it aside for now....tried to contact you on fb but you were being snobby and wouldn't answer me. Like the poem and poet ya know.
qimissung
10-27-2009, 01:14 PM
Thank you for writing about those (of us) who grovel in the shadows of the the king's castle, Prince! :)
motherhubbard
10-28-2009, 01:31 PM
I read this and two others to a friend this morning. This one made her sad. We both thought it very good.
PrinceMyshkin
10-28-2009, 02:15 PM
I read this and two others to a friend this morning. This one made her sad. We both thought it very good.

OK, we know that one of the two others was the Ode to Pancakes... What was the other one? Or have you posted a response to that as well?
motherhubbard
10-28-2009, 05:16 PM
No I haven't. I've only read this, the pancake poem, and the autumn poetry contest poems all semester. What luck! only these and not a bad one in the bunch. I read the poem I voted for and would have read all of them to her, but we both had to get back to homework.