Awake (Weird romantic drama)

[sc9108]

Hi, I have this idea I'm going over in my head...
Its about a teenage boy who has a very dull mundane life, and when he goes to sleep he has a second life where he is with this girl who he has fallen in love with..

Basically he is more awake in his sleep than in reality, and as the story goes on the two clash, and the dream world starts seeping into reality and effecting it.

This is the first scene just so you get an idea of it.

(Oh and its script format :) Might film it !)

(1)
From first person.
Really quiet.

Darkness hear moving around in the background.
Female Voice ''Your not looking are you ?''
Male Voice ''No I'm not''
Girl''ok, well... you can look now''

See hand moving from eyes slowly then

Girl''No no wait !''
Boy''What ..I didn't see''
Girl''Good, well just hold on a second.. theres a label stuck on the back'' laughs

Boy''ok..'' laughs ''Well I didn't see so''
Girl''... ok... its gone .. open your eyes''

Hand moves away slowly then stops

Girl''Why'd you stop ?''
Boy''I don't want to open my eyes.''
Girl''Why not ?''
Boy''Because.. I might wake up''
Girl''Yeah.. but still.. you might not..''
Boy''Ok ..I'll try''
Girl''Okay well open them''

Faint alarm beeping getting louder

Hands moves away.

Blurry figure of a girl wearing a red dress.
Then fades out.


You can see its pretty strange... :)

I just felt like doing something different rather than another boring drama or horror..

[edwardlittle]

I can picture the rest of this in my mind already. In fact i could finish it myself, but that would be stealing... ;)

[sc9108]

I can picture the rest of this in my mind already. In fact i could finish it myself, but that would be stealing... ;)Wow thank you :) !
That really means a lot actually, that its made you think all of that just from the very first scene :).

[edwardlittle]

My first story has been waiting for replies since yesterday, it would mean a lot to me if i got some, but seriously yours a kind of story that would make the reader happy as they saw him start to live the life he could only dream of.