Behind Glass

[Dark Muse]

This one is a little different, but there is something about it that appeals to me.

Behind Glass

Dark eyes
watch through the rain
black skies

She lives
behind windows
moon glows

Winds sigh
fading away
lost cry

[haymanali]

Verses that take me far beyond words.

[Dark Muse]

Thank you very much

[DanielBenoit]

You're right, it is a bit different in attributes than your other poems, as well as in sublty.

I particuarly like the vividness portrayed in just a few words. Very simple, very vivid.

*edit*

Despite this, upon revisiting, I do find the rhythme to be a bit off. I don't know, the 2-4-2 syllable structure just doesn't appeal to me (in this poem at least).

[tailor STATELY]

Very nice.

For some reason I sought to alter the poem extracting the second line from each verse for interpretation:

"Dark eyes
black skies"
....................sad, dark eyes; dark as night

"She lives
moon glows"
....................she lives even as the moon glows: a reflection ("Behind Glass")

"Winds sigh
lost cry"
.....................her cries/torments unheard, lost to the winds as sighs; or perhaps her only solace is in the wind sighing


Which leaves the extract:

"watch through the rain" "behind windows" "fading away"

To my mind a tragedy is revealed giving a sense of hopelessness/loneliness of the person in the poem who lives an unfulfilled/unhappy life feeling like she is not living, but merely "fading away".

Thank you for sharing.

[Dark Muse]

Those are some interesting thoughts tailor.

This poem was meant to have something of a Lady Shalott feeling to it,

[Pendragon]

Short but extremely well thought out and nicely paced. A keepsake!

[PrinceMyshkin]

A tribute to the art of trusting the reader to be present!