Treehouse

[DanBierce]

If you were a tree
I would want to be the house
held in your arms, and,

as lovers climbed you
to enter me,

they'd hear the birds
sing in your hair,

and kiss
as their legs dangled
from my scrap-wood mouth.

[firefangled]

A very fresh description of rejection, if I read it correctly.

I had to read this several times to get the sense of it. I think I get it, but I'm not sure.

I keep wanting the word "you" after "kiss" in S3 to make the irony work and the self-deprication complete.

[DanBierce]

Thanks for the read and feedback, Firefangled. What you read into this isn't its intent, but one of the great things about poetry is that each reader can get something different from them.

[~Sophia~]

Hi Dan... this is one of the most unique poems about inspired love I've ever had the pleasure to read. Bravo.

[Buh4Bee]

I have read a couple of your poems and I always enjoy them. I enjoyed the idea of a strapped wood house. Very innocent.

[DanBierce]

Thanks, Sophia and Jersea. I appreciate your appreciation of this poem.