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D.P.Trottier
09-23-2009, 01:32 PM
It flowed about the body
in the ribbon-like form of masculine blue light.
This "ribbon" was the reincarnation of pure sex.
This intimate material began in the mouth, like a tongue;
it pierced through the pouting, red lips-
Sex often begins with a kiss.

The ribbon continued it's journey upwards through the head
and it spawned again, after rapidly circling the mind,
coming out from behind and under the left eye-
attempting to complete the brains essential cycle
of eye contact
(which is the test of true connection that the fraudulent would fail).

The ribbon streamed down and around,
never ceasing its fluidiity,
teasing the sensually moist torso with the necessity of tightened muscles.

The ribbon drooled at the sight of the hands.
The dominant hand was bent back,
gripping at the bed sheet for dear life. It was feeling life.
It was fulfilling its occupation by propping up the body-
The other hand curled, using fingertips as tools
to feel the fraying edge of the ribbon
that, in turn, had been intentionally clenching the wrist;
a near-pain expirience that primitively involved blood flow.

The ribbon, of course, now anticipated
the climactic on-coming of between-leg indulgence.
Every section of the body worked together to acheive
this instinctual and ecstatic epitome of physical unison.

The eyes closed and the lips pursed
under extreme pressure from beautiful and unseen energy.
The torso jerked and twisted so suddenly
but also so naturally that it managed to retain a certain level of dirty majesty.
The hands tried to compensate for the lust-flooded mind,
so they moved quickly, grasping at every piece of flesh
just trying to formulate an explanation for that moments perfection.
And finally, pelvic radiation.

The ribbon became too content to move at all.
Overwhelmed by the satisfaction of its one need in this universe.
It became limp. It slid down the calf of the leg with a barely audible sigh.

The ribbon, and its color, began to fade as it passed the feet,
which were faded.
Even vision was faded
by the arrival of seemingly impossible relaxation.

The ribbon fell and dissipated
into a still lake of absent space.

PrinceMyshkin
09-24-2009, 10:45 AM
Amongst the many admirable qualities of this tauntingly lubricious poem is the quality of humour that attends it. For too many of us, writing about or experiencing love is a deathly solemn matter.

Buh4Bee
09-24-2009, 03:11 PM
Lubricious is a very accurate word to describe this poem. I thought it erotic, but nicely crafted. I was not sure what this line meant:

The ribbon drooled at the sight of the hands

Is there something compelling about the hands?

D.P.Trottier
09-24-2009, 05:49 PM
I think hands are an extremely important key to intimacy in and out of the bedroom, whether it is holding another hand or sliding around your partners waist. the loins and the lips only really interact with other loins and lips (for the most part) but hands go everywhere for stimulation of both parties

Buh4Bee
09-24-2009, 08:08 PM
That make complete sense! I agree. Hands are very important to me, especially a partners hands. They must be attractive, at least to me.

Thanks for the explanation and again, very intense good poem.

rachelgreen
10-21-2009, 12:27 AM
it's a good poem:nod:




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PrinceMyshkin
10-21-2009, 12:36 PM
May I offer you
the bread of comradeship?
The salt of truth?
The wine of deep remembering,
and the courtesy of my heart?