Mantis

[Dark Muse]

Mantis

Frozen in your crystal prison
soulless beauty now arisen
your powdered white caught in the light
wings never again to take flight
fallen into the waters plight
locked now in your pose of insight
your grace only morbid delight
elegance touching upon fright
your life entered its last season
coldness found in nature's reason.

[DanielBenoit]

I feel a bit ambivelent towards the rhyming scheme; it fits very well into the nature of the poem, and yet it is a bit distracting, I don't know.

I really like the title, it sets the mood for the poem in a very subtle way.

Also, I loooove the final two lines:



your life entered its last season
coldness found in nature's reason.

[Dark Muse]

Thank you, it is a bit of a different sort of rhyme schme. Originally, the last two lines are suppose to rhyme with the first two lines, but I did not want to compromise my first line, but there just isn't that much that rhymes with prison, so I altered the rhyme scheme a bit.