dara.cv
09-21-2009, 04:04 PM
This is an oldy of mine, just wanting some reviews. I still like it, though, now i think it is rather sloppy in form.
Love has no enemies,but
at an adversities' kiss.
The parting of two
is only parted in someone else's expense.
And how can she breathe
the air another's other leaves?
You're leaving her
choking on the fumes of invented content.
Love has no wake,but
to a lover's heartfelt kiss.
The joining of two
is only seen in one another's bliss.
How can I breathe
the air another leaves-
your leaving me-
gasping at the fury of being breathless.
For love can be empty,
but in victory it is full.
A kiss could be a deadly sleep
to the dreamers or for the fool.
And love can be fickle,
but when it is true is still.
An enwrapping can be en-shrouding,
An obligation to a heart's beating thrill.
Love is like a poem,
you need to read between the lines.
Feelings can be broken
a future can be stolen
by a framework framed
by bent designs
thus it is not love
alive
when in its
instance
it only
connives.
Love has no enemies,but
at an adversities' kiss.
The parting of two
is only parted in someone else's expense.
And how can she breathe
the air another's other leaves?
You're leaving her
choking on the fumes of invented content.
Love has no wake,but
to a lover's heartfelt kiss.
The joining of two
is only seen in one another's bliss.
How can I breathe
the air another leaves-
your leaving me-
gasping at the fury of being breathless.
For love can be empty,
but in victory it is full.
A kiss could be a deadly sleep
to the dreamers or for the fool.
And love can be fickle,
but when it is true is still.
An enwrapping can be en-shrouding,
An obligation to a heart's beating thrill.
Love is like a poem,
you need to read between the lines.
Feelings can be broken
a future can be stolen
by a framework framed
by bent designs
thus it is not love
alive
when in its
instance
it only
connives.