Tiny Infidelities

[PrinceMyshkin]

Let’s talk about small infidelities...

Actually, there’s no such thing
because even the tiniest of them
is a rupture
in a fabric that’s useless
unless it is whole.

You negotiate with yourself,
close and tight; It’s not as if
I slept with her a second time...
Or Actually, I didn’t actually sleep
with her, not really...

But it’s as if a single thread
had come unstitched from the cloth
and you pull to get rid of it,
that tiny, tiny part of the whole.

[balehead]

I'm not exactly a poetry buff; but I think that your poem is beautiful ... and very thought provoking, it was an enjoyment to read! Please post more of your poems!

[qimissung]

A fabric that useless unless it's whole-what a true thing and what a beautiful thought...

[Virgil]

Love it!! I love when you sink into a good metaphor Prince and you push it to its end, the end being tinged with your wry way of looking at the world. :)

[Pendragon]

But it’s as if a single thread
had come unstitched from the cloth
and you pull to get rid of it,
that tiny, tiny part of the whole.


An ending worthy to be a poem in and of itself!

[AuntShecky]

The fabric metaphor works for a poem itself (yours included.) That's why we have to choose every word
carefully.

[Granny5]

Prince, this is just lovely. I've got to spend some time catching up on your poems. They seem to have gotten even better.

[a_little_wisp]

Oh, oh, oh-- fantastic metaphor!! And I agree entirely!

( ... Although, I do have an on-and-off affair with tiramisu. Uh oh. :/ )

[blazeofglory]

Let’s talk about small infidelities...

Actually, there’s no such thing
because even the tiniest of them
is a rupture
in a fabric that’s useless
unless it is whole.

You negotiate with yourself,
close and tight; It’s not as if
I slept with her a second time...
Or Actually, I didn’t actually sleep
with her, not really...

But it’s as if a single thread
had come unstitched from the cloth
and you pull to get rid of it,
that tiny, tiny part of the whole.

It is a very interesting poem; indeed speaks of something most of us go through in life; and of course it is really hard to discern as to which are big and which small are infidelities. But your presentation of it is amazing

[Delta40]

very insightful

[PrinceMyshkin]

Prince, this is just lovely. I've got to spend some time catching up on your poems. They seem to have gotten even better.

Better or not, the credit here:

http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=43451
belongs in large part to my subconscious, as I explained in response to Virgil's comment.


Oh, oh, oh-- fantastic metaphor!! And I agree entirely!

( ... Although, I do have an on-and-off affair with tiramisu. Uh oh. :/ )

My understanding of "tiramisu" is that it means pick me up. The question between you and Signor T. is who picks whom up?

[Buh4Bee]

Enjoyed this very much.

[cogs]

interesting... i wanted to see what happened when someone pulled, and what was exposed in doing so.